Robo-nono

Moving toward a common core standard created by President Obama has forced teachers accross America to consider feeding students written essays through a machine called an E-Rater. Michael Winerip from the New York Times explains that the impressiveness from the E-Rater comes from the fact that this technology can grade about 16,000 essays in 20 seconds. Steve Kolowich from the Inside Higher Ed assures worried students and teachers that "the differences, across a number of different brands of automated essay scoring software (AES) and essay types, were minute. The results demonstrated that over all, autmated essay scoring was capable of producing scores similar to human scores for extended response writing items." However great this new software may sound, further experiements have exposes significant flaws in the E-Rater.
 In my opinion, there is absoluty no way an automated correcting machine will ever be able to  function like an actual human brain. Being "easily gamed, vulnerable to test prep, sets a very limited and rigid standard for what good writing is, and will pressure teachers to dumb down writing instructions," are all flaws stated by Winerip. However, what makes these E-Raters even worse is the fact that they don't cross check facts students use to back up an argument. I believe that if E-Raters are used to correct essays, students will soon learn of all the "cheats" that the E-Rater identifies as "good" writing skills and will ultimatly produce a higher score. In essence, these E-Raters will eventually force students to create horrible writing habbits all for the desire of a higher score on standardized tests.
ETS Website explicitly goes into detail to explain just how the the new E-Raters work. It is described as an engine composed of a "multiplicity of independent sub-features." Intrestingly, none of the said sub-features is that of a cross checking database. ETS website sais the features include "content analysis based on vocabulary measures, lexical complexity/diction, proportion of grammar errors, proportion of usage errors, proportion of mechanial errors, organization and develpment scores, and features rewarding idiomatic phraseology." To be honest, I didn't know what half of those features even means. I almost think that the creators of this machine doesn't want anyone to know exactly how it works and makes all teachers simply believe by word of mouth that it would be a better option to grade written assignments.
However, the only thing I will compliment this E-Rater on is consistency. The simple fact that the teacher knows that every single test will be graded exactly the same every time.

A Ladder to the Sky: Personal Reflection

            Even though my parents and I never directly conversed the discussion, all along I had considered myself to be living in the middle to upper-middle class region of our country. What clued me in were considering various variables such as being able to live in a more than comfortable house, venturing all over the United States and outside it's boarders, and knowing that my college education is paid for. I found it peculiar that the article made an argument stating that America had moved toward an appearance of "classlessness". I had always thought that America was mainly comprised of middle class citizens, opposed to the harsh gap between rich and poor like some European countries have. However after reading this article, I found that I could almost directly relate to a specific quote as well as more. The quote is, "Parents with money, education, and connections cultivate in their children the habits that the meritocracy rewards." Knowing that my parents were not born millionaires, and that they had to work hard to earn their wealth that they have today, I feel like they have instilled important habits that will allow me to do the same. As the article states, "Today, anyone may have a shot at becoming a United States Supreme Court justice or a C.E.O., and there are more and more self-made billionaires." This is a perfect example that encompasses the type of economy that my generation is living in. It's honestly amazing how we have so many opportunities to succeed under our own making. The important thing to take away from this article is that "there are poor and rich in the United States, of course, the argument goes; but as long as one can become the other, as long as there is something close to equality of opportunity, the differences between them do not add up to class barriers."  

1/2 transcendentalist

"If you are cheated out of a single dollar by your neighbor, you do not rest satisfied with knowing that you are cheated, or with saying that you are cheated, or even with petitioning him to pay you your due; but you take effectual steps at once to obtain the full amount, and see that you are never cheated again (Thoreau 4)." This quote from Civil Disobedience expresses the meaning of a philosophical movement that caught fire among writers and citizens in the United States around the 1800s. Transcendentalists protest against the general state of culture and society. Their core belief was in the ultimate divinity of both nature and humans and intense feelings of self-reliance. The real question is whether or not I would follow in the footsteps of these important American writers and “conform” to the transcendentalist movement. Oh the irony!

I would consider myself a half-transcendentalist in the fact that I don’t want to protest everything my government passes and enforces. I feel that society needs rules and regulations in order for it to work smoothly. There is a quote from Self-Reliance by Emerson that comes to mind as a good example of the exact opposite theory that I believe in, “Let us affront and reprimand the smooth mediocrity and squalid contentment of the times, and hurl in the face of custom, and trade, and office, the fact which is the upshot of all history, that there is a great responsible Thinker and Actor working wherever a man works; that a true man belongs to no other time or place, but is center of things (Emerson 4)." I do not think we should hurl in the face of custom, trade, and office. Although that image is extremely graphic, I think these qualities speak to our character more and that is why we should keep them.

I said I consider myself half a transcendentalist because I do love the image of all of nature as being the Divine. I'm not really sure where I got it from, but I have always had an immense respect for the land and nature around me. It often times reminds me of something so pure and untouchable; I think that is also why I was able to connect with the idea of divinity.

In short, I would throw out all ideas of nonconformity with respects to government, but hold fast to the idea that nature is divine.

Personal Declaration of Independence

When in the Course of an older teenager’s life, it becomes necessary to assert dominance over any younger parties who happen to reside under the same roof as us; we must assume total independence to which our newly earned age has granted us.

We hold these truths to be self-evident, that all teenagers of the eldest variety will be endowed by our Superiors certain unalienable privileges, that among these are a later curfew, laptop superiority, and the pursuit of total dominance. That, to secure these privileges, elders are present among living quarters to validate the teenager’s superiority and to keep the peace among residents. That, whenever any younger resident tries to rise up against the grain of hierarchy, it is the right of the teenager to disown or chastise them, and to reassert total dominance. Age, indeed, will dictate the older sibling’s long establishment of rights that should not be changed for any reason whatsoever. The history of the eldest sibling is a history of repeated undermining and exploitation by those inferior in age. To prove this, let facts be revealed to the modern world.

They have refused to leave the desired elder alone especially when the eldest is most occupied.

They have called together a congregation of minions of equal annoyance to cause havoc in the threshold.

They have acquired the eldest’s assistance to transport them to obscure places at the most inconvenient of times.   

They have obstructed the eldest from using the lavatory when its private and exclusive use is most desired.

For quartering large bodies of friends over an extended period of time:

For exciting domestic insurrection among us:

In every stage of these Oppressions, we have petitioned for righteous status as noble and superior brothers and sisters by birthright and most importantly birth order. We have appealed to their native immaturity and although tied by common kindred relations they have remained deaf to the voice of superiority.

We, therefore, the first born of the household, in General Assembly, appeal to the Supreme Judge of the World, or parents, do solemnly publish and declare that we ought to be free and independent from those lower in the birth order then us. We are absolved from any and all family ties and from all duties encumbered. And in support of this declaration, with firm reliance on the protection of our station in life, we mutually pledge to each other our friendship, our iPods, and our single bedrooms.  

Map Project

Observations:
-California is depicted as its own island with another sea that separates it from the mainland
-Entire map is in a very old form of Spanish language
-Large pieces of land or bodies of water have the same names as they do today
-Multiple rivers within the Florida and Alabama region don’t exist today
-Large animals are drawn on map to show what region they thrive in
-Lots of places are named after pre-existing countries (New Canada, New France, New Mexico)
-Sense of proportions is off, the Great Lakes are pushed much further up into Canada than actually geographically correct.
-Mountain ranges present
-Longitudinal and Latitudinal lines present
-A depiction of an Indian in legend
-Bermuda is geographically incorrect
-No religious markings present

2. The largest narrative that this map presents is how much of an influence the spanish culture had over America during that time period. This can be shown through the language that this map is written in and the fact that much of the Mexico region is finely detailed with names of regions and rivers. Another obvious narrative that this map presents is that hunting and livestock was a large part of these people’s lives. I noticed that there are large pictures of animals that live in that region all across the main land mass of America. The fact that “New France,” “New Belgium,” and “New Canada” are present on the map makes me believe that Columbus’s spanish crew that came with him to take over, were living with people of other nationalities. “issues of race, class, and gender are increasingly engaged to mark English-Puritan identity as white (Babb 62).” This quote also points out that they had to share the land with these other countries. I had also noticed that some of the map isn’t geographically correct. For example I noticed that Lake Pontchartrain in New Orleans is geographically correct, but there are no rivers that match the ones I saw connected to it on the map. This could tell us how much the land has changed since the discovering of America, or it could tell us that this map gives us false information about where these geographic landmarks are. Another portion that isn’t geographically correct is in the midwest region of the map. I found that what I think is the great lakes are actually pushed much further up into Canada than is actually correct. I’m not absolutely sure that these are supposed to be the great lakes, but if they are not then that shows that much of Northern America had yet to be accurately graphed on a map.

Inaugural Words

After reviewing all the speeches, I observed that Lincoln was the only one who referenced God six times during his speech. On the web site it says that Lincoln mainly focused his second inaugural speech about the civil war. God and war are two words that I usually don't associate together in a speech of this nature. It just makes me wonder under what context he used these two words throughout his speech.

Another observation that I made was the almost every speech used the word God at least once or twice which was odd to me. Considering that the very first amendment to the constitution abolishes the right of congress to establish any religion for the nation, every president still makes a religious reference in each speech. I think it shows how deeply humanity is still scared or feels about the war over religion and how it is such a huge part of the world's history.

The final observation I made is fairly obvious, but surprisingly refreshing. Lincoln is one of the few who doesn't use the word government or nation multiple times in his speech. I like the fact that he was focused on other major issues with the country and recognized that other issues could take a back seat for a while. I don't mean to say that none of the other presidents were not in-tune or connected to the people whom they govern, it's just that sometimes the president's agenda can consist largely of what needs to be fixed in the capital.  

My Fear of Hair

It sounds really stupid, but hair absolutely creeps me out. It's not the hair that is still attached to the top of your head that gets me, it's the disgusting loose strands that seem to multiply once you find one on your shirt. It is the feeling of hair against my skin specifically that really gets me. I will not touch loose hair period! And just my luck, I don't know if it is just because I have curly hair, but I shed worse than my fluffy husky. To put it into perspective, by the time I'm done taking a shower in the morning, there is a clump of wet hair the size of a small rodent clogging the drain. I have to make one of my sisters pick it out because all I can think about is the rodent like clump crawling up my arm in a desperate attempt to reattach itself to my head. I won't even take the hair out of my brush, I will literally use it until you can no longer see the bristles. Ever wonder why I don't leave my hair down all that often? I refuse to let my hair get any excuse to dance freely against my skin.

The feeling of hair on my skin may creep me out, but the feeling of it in my mouth is a stone cold horror of mine. Let's be honest, nobody appreciates hair in his or her food to begin with, but getting hair in my mouth became a fear of mine after I watched the terrifying "G" rated movie Hotel for Dogs with my seven year old sister. There is a scene in the movie where the kids are forced to eat these horrifyingly grotesque T.V. dinner prepared by the "evil step-mom" of the film. As the kids were eating, one of them all of a sudden stops eating and carefully places the fork back on the table. He then turns to his sister with a look of utter nausea on his face. With his two fingers he pulls out the biggest and longest chunk of blond hair out from his gaping mouth. The only problem was, none of the kids have blond hair. The camera then pans over to the step-mom putting dishes away in the background and it is then that you remember that she has platinum blond hair. Ever since then, I get an involuntary gag reflex whenever I even think about that stupid movie.

Seriously god forbid I ever find a hair in my mouth. I look like such an idiot when I do find one. First I get the ever-so-appetizing gag reflex, and then I dig around frantically in every crevasse of my mouth with a quivering hand until I find the culprit. By then my stomach is trying to hurl itself outside my body to obliterate any appetite I had left.      

Harry Potter

As nerdy as it sounds, a book that I can really relate to would be Harry Potter. By no means are my parents dead, and I didn't live in a broom closet under the stairs, but it was a book that my dad would read to me every night. We would look forward to finding out what happens to the famous Harry Potter. Even though Harry Potter doesn't have a traditional family, his family of close friends and professors reminded me a lot of my own. I too agree that people don't have to be related to you by blood for you to consider them your family. Plus, the relationship that Harry had with Professor Dumbledore was close to what kind of relationship I had with my dad. I know I could go to him with anything, and he may not always give me the answer straight away, but he let me figure it out for myself.

Another way I could relate to this book was the fact that Harry Potter was nearly the same age as I was when my dad and I first started to read the series. I loved the fact that sometimes Harry would encounter the same problems that I faced in my life. Granted, he could almost always fix his problem with a little bit of magic, but I liked the fact that it humanized him. I like that he wasn't always perfect and got into trouble once in a while. It's strange to think, but I truly "grew up" with Harry. When the final book came out, my heart pained when I finished it because I knew it was truly the end. For seven years I had learned so much about a magical world that sometimes I felt like I was actually there.

The Harry Potter series made an incredable impact on so many young adults lives. Even though Harry lived in a made up world, almost everyone could still relate to the many adventures he went on or problems he faced. The series may be finished, but I will always remember my Dad and I reading those books every night.

Animal, Vegetable, Miracle

Aug 28, 2012

Eating, one of my favorite ways to indulge into one of Mother Nature's most precious gifts. When I saw the title of the book I was immediately fascinated and wanted to know more. I had always thought myself to be a pretty good eater, in that I try to eat all my fruits, veggies and stay away from the over processed food. Barbara Kingsolver certainly proved me wrong in her book Animal, Vegetable, Miracle. I also didn't know much about farming, other than that my grandparents survived off of it, and how to take care of the small garden that my family has in the backyard. It only took me a couple of pages to realize that farming is a serious business, I applaud the Kingsolver family for uprooting themselves from Arizona and replanting themselves in the North Carolina soil.

"We're a nation with an eating disorder" (Kingsolver 13). Right away this quote stuck out to me as I was reading. I honestly couldn't have stated it any better myself. As the book progressed, I realized that our nation is in serious trouble, but what's worse, is that it is going to take quite a few years to even remotely regain what we have lost. America is swimming in fry oil; however, it also came to my attention that a new movement is currently underway to restore America's "genuine food culture." I love how Kingsolver is able to break away from the industrial food line and, in a sense, find the cure to our great eating disorder through growing her own food.

Following this family through all of the vegetable seasons blew my mind! I, like every other industrialized family, had become accustom to eating everything out of season. It was so much easier to simply pick up a can of corn for dinner than actually wait for corn season to roll around again. "A season of foods unfolding as if from one single plant... We'll call it vegetannual" (Kingsolver 63-65). The point being that any part of the plant can become a food. This was Kingsolver's explanation to why American's seem to be eating more fruits and vegetables out of season. We don't understand that there is an order to each season of harvests.

Another aspect of the book that I truly enjoyed was that every few pages there was an absolutely delicious sounding recipe using all of the fresh ingredients grown from the garden. It was extremely hard to read through these on an empty stomach! I did find, however, that these recipes came in handy. Through my family's health insurance, my mom signed up for a Community Supported Agriculture (CSA) farmers co-op. Through this, our health insurance encourages families to eat more farm fresh fruits and vegetables by offering to pay for half of the cost. Every week we pick up a box full of fruits and veggies that were picked hours ago. Some of the vegetables, collard greens and chorizo, we didn't exactly know how to cook them or what to do with them, this is where the book came in handy! All of a sudden my book became a delicious cook book that my family could choose dinner from and we got to taste all the fresh ingredients in each meal.

By the end of the book, I wanted to go out and make a garden for myself. The way I see food today has changed because of this book. I learned a lot about farming that I never knew before. It's almost too bad that more people don't know about the benefits from all these fresh veggies, but I'm glad people like Kingsolver has spoken about her adventure in sustaining her family off only the things that grow from her backyard. It's time to get our hands dirty and start bringing fresh produce back into our households. I'm glad to say that I am part of the movement to bring back America's genuine food culture.

The Perfect Non-Crime

Thursday, August 23, 2012

 

This essay came to my attention after hearing about all the violent acts of crime happening not only in the United States, but also locally in Wisconsin. The author, Michael L. Rich, brings a compelling argument to the table and questions just how far authorities can push the line of punishment until they are violating people's personal freedom.

Rich's largest argument in the essay was about the distinction between mere thoughts and actions. I didn't realize that there was an entire section to our law system that has to do with so-called strict-liability offenses. In this category of crime, the crimes committed are forbidden regardless of the actor's state of mind. It was at this point that I started to disagree with what Rich had to say."In such cases, using technology to prevent the crime entirely would not unduly burden individual freedom; it would simply be effective enforcement of the statute" (Rich 3). He goes on to explain that if there was only some sort of technology that had the ability to read citizen's minds and assess if that person was mentally unstable or not. Almost like a sort of mind reading device. In my mind, I would not like the government to intrude on my personal thoughts. The line must be drawn in the sand at some point. Although Rich may be on the right track to crime prevention, I couldn't get past this major flaw in his argument.

The other flaw in his argument that I found while reading was about having breathalyzers installed into every car. "The program, the Driver Alcohol Detection System for Safety, is developing in-vehicle technology that automatically checks a driver's blood-alcohol level and, if that level is above the legal limit, prevents the car from starting" (Rich 1). I understand that drunken driving is a growing concern especially in Wisconsin; however, what if you were the person who was the designated driver for the night out with your friends? With that many drunk people in your car would the car not start? I do agree that if the company were to perfect this technology that it would practically deprive people of the choice to commit the crime in the first place. As for right now however, I feel that the technology is too premature and still needs reconsideration and further evaluation.

This essay gives a new look to how people commit crimes, and just how far the authorities can go to stop them. It is certainly hard to stop a lot of these crimes without infringing on people's personal freedom. We must draw the line in the sand somewhere!

Gun Control Not the Answer

Friday, August 10, 2012

 

In light of the recent Aurora and Sikh Temple shooting, people have started to wonder if something should be done about current gun control laws. The ultimate goal being to stop these terrible crimes from occurring altogether; however, how to reach this goal has sparked some major debate. An anonymous writer on 123HelpMe.com has taken steps to further look into both sides of the argument to see if one comes out victorious over the other. As I was reading, several quotes came to my attention.

The first quote that stuck out in my mind was when the author was reviewing the second amendment of the constitution dealing with the right to bear arms. "The Amendment is really saying two things at once," the author states. He or she explains that the second amendment may be interpreted differently in recent years. "A well regulated Militia, being necessary to the security of a free State, the right of the people to keep and bear Arms, shall not be infringed." The first part deals with the maintaining of a national militia to protect the freedom of the country. The second part states that it is the right of the people to bear arms, not the army; however, isn't the army made up of people? If there wasn't any people, we wouldn't have an army.

When the author went into detail as to how the Amendment is saying two different things at once, it made me stop and think which way the correct interpretation was. I had never noticed that the Amendment protects the right of people and the militia all in one. However, the United States no longer has a true militia. I wondered if the Amendment would read any differently if our government were to rewrite it to fit current times.

"This is true, but it has been proven that it is kids that are around guns that are actually safer than those who aren't," this is the second quote that came to my attention as I was reading. The idea behind adding this bit of information into the essay was to add a concrete fact to support the anti gun control argument.

Although this fact or statement may be convincing, once I did further investigation as to where the author pulled this bit of information from, I actually found that it was from the NRA website. The only reason this quote came to my attention was because I found it hard to believe. I understand that it is a great counter argument, but I found from better sources (i.e. my mother) that the three leading causes of death in teenagers is drunk driving, suicide, and homicide. I know for a fact that you need a weapon of some sort 90% of the time for the last two causes. If the government repeals all gun control laws then we might see a significant increase in the last two causes of death in teenagers. Don't get me wrong, it makes a great counter argument, but I just don't think it is a very concrete fact.

The last quote I could completely agree with when it comes to this topic. "That is why it is better to teach people to use firearms properly; this will prevent accidents from happening..." The essay goes on to state even more evidence of countries who have trained a large percentage of the population on how to handle fire arms, and in return the country saw a significant drop in crime rate. I thought this quote was the most compelling quote in the whole essay, and I feel it may be the answer to our problems. More research may have to be done to make sure that it truly works, but it is defiantly a step in the right direction.

A Vindication of the Rights of Women

Sunday, July 29, 2012

 

What an interesting essay! I had mixed feelings at some points in the essay, but one could really tell that Mary Wollstonecraft was extremely passionate about what she was saying. I was split down the middle on if I truly agreed or disagreed with this essay. There are a couple of spots that I can argue both sides, so I will analyze both to be fair.



From a woman's point of view.



When I write from this point of view, one saying comes to mind. Well behaved women don't make history. I feel that this may sum up what Wollstonecraft was trying to get across to the male population. Now a days, women sometimes take for granted how much freedom we have because these very loud and rambunctious women already stood up for our rights. This line from the essay is a perfect example, "How grossly do they insult us who thus advise us only to render ourselves gentle, domestic brutes!" (Wollstonecraft 1). Wollstonecraft has realized that men seem to keep us in a state of "childhood" because men thought us to be inferior, and to be honest, I would be furious too. Wollstonecraft explains that to be a women is almost a curse, and there is nothing we can do about it. I am glad that women like this realized this inequality early and helped reshape our society so women, like myself, can live with the same opportunities that men have.



From a male's point of view.



This essay can be a little maddening if you don't have the right mind set. The one thing I didn't enjoy about this essay was that Wollstonecraft almost completely tore apart the male population and belittle their very existence. "Husbands, as well as their helpmates, are often only overgrown children" (Wollstonecraft 4). How insulting?! I realize that maybe some men act like this, but there are far more dignified and noble men to outnumber that slim percentage. I couldn't get over the fact that Wollstonecraft continued to point figures at the male population, and maybe she had the right to, but she didn't have to be so harsh in my opinion. The most important thing to keep in mind when reading this essay is what time period it was written in. I once heard someone explaining to someone else that men thought it was the gentlemen thing to do to keep women out of politics and government because it would mean that women wouldn't have to bear that burden. Men took it over so women wouldn't have to.



Overall I enjoyed the essay, but I would have liked to hear both sides of the argument instead of just one.

Is Google Making Us Stupid?

Sunday, July 15, 2012

 

I thought this essay was extremely relatable with some arguments. I can agree that my concentration also starts to drift off after two or three large pages of text. I couldn't help but have this phrase continuously echo through my mind as I tried to get through all seven pages of text. I found that this essay brings up a largely debatable topic that most adults are facing today.

I have to agree that the way people are thinking and operating is always changing. I feel that it all depends on what you are raised with and what you are most comfortable with. The growing age of young adults simply has the advantage of growing up with super advanced technology and the ability to adapt to new technology relatively quickly.

As I was reading this essay, my phone vibrated indicating I had a new message. The message was from another classmate who had asked what the essay I was reading was about. It was then that it dawned on me that the current age of young adults is only give 160 characters to write the exact same information a seven page essay explained. I have a feeling that this may have something to do with the argument. The young adults are always trying to find a faster way to get right to the point in the new media messaging. I personally like this. I like it when people can be straight forward and get right to the point.

After finishing this essay, I had to stop and ask myself what the problem really was? In my opinion, it is not Google that is making us stupid. It is the human error that people are becoming so frustrated with. If Google put out a short informational video on how to better search what one is looking for, then I have a feeling people would find exactly what they want faster.

Total Eclipse

Sunday, July 15, 2012

 

Let me start off by saying that I am seriously struggling to figure out how this website works. If anyone has some helpful hints, anything would help at this point.

Anyways, when I first started reading this essay, I was completely thrown for a loop. The first question I had about this essay came with the second paragraph. I had no idea where Annie Dillard was going with the several paragraphs worth of descriptions of the one painting of a clown made out of vegetables. I thought it sounded super creepy as she started to explain it, but when I continued to read more about how this painting impacted her life, it made me think that this painting is somewhat of an eclipse on her life. Just like the eclipse she witnesses later, the painting is a small, minor event in her life, and yet creates such a huge impact on the rest of her life.

On page 481, I made a connection to the clown painting when Dillard was explaining how the earth looked as the sun slowly slipped behind the moon. She explains that everything is "wrong."

"The sun was going, and the world was wrong. The grasses were wrong; they were platinum. Their every detail of stem, head, and blade shone lightless and artificially distinct as an art photographer's platinum print. This color has never been seen on earth. The hues were metallic; their finish was matte."

This made me think of the clown painting again where everything is, again "wrong." One of the reasons she was so taken back by the clown painting was because of the fact that it was made out of vegetables. A clown is obviously not made out of vegetables, but it makes the mind take a second look at it because it is not what it normally sees. With the eclipse, it is the exact same logic. All the colors of the world are "wrong," but it makes the mind look at it in a new or different light.

At some parts, I must admit I got a little lost. I didn't understand why Dillard kept making all these dead people references. What do dead people have to do with an eclipse of the sun? I also didn't understand why she had to go on for the better part of four pages explaining how the sun looked behind the moon, and she could have summed it all up with "it looks like a life saver." That was a little annoying, but overall it was a very thought provoking essay.

 

Talk of the Town

After my long day of boating, in the hot northern Wisconsin sun, I was not expecting to come back and read such a powerful and mood changing essay. I really enjoyed the vivid word choice that both authors used with ease in the essays. Years ago, I took a trip to New York City as a vacation to see the great sites. At that time, I witnessed the cleanup of our two great towers. Through John Updike’s words, I could completely picture what the area of the destruction looked like; I re-lived the same intense emotion I experienced while I was down at the base of the towers when I read this essay.

 It caught me by surprise when he explained the event as a “nightmare ballet,” I had never thought to think of it in that sense. Both authors were blunt, to-the-point, and opinionated in their writing styles. The raw language that they explain this event as was refreshing and engaging to read. Susan Sontag almost seamed anti-government at some points in her essay. She chastised our “robotic president” who only ever babies the citizens. Reading these essays after a long day of swimming was relaxing and I truly enjoyed the open minded opinions of both these authors.    

introduction

I'm Willa Papalia-Beatty. I attend McFarland High School, and fill my days with as many things I love. My main passion is sports, especially Softball and Cross Country. I am the varsity shortstop with a .682 batting average to earn myself a First Team All Conference Award. Cross Country for me is more of a cross training to keep me in shape for softball. I hope to attend the United States Coast Guard Academy, UW La Crosse, or UW Whitewater to earn my degree as an In-Flight Medical Surgeon for Medflight operations. I'm not quite sure why I'm taking AP Composition in my high school career since my degree is in the medical field, but I suppose paperwork comes with any profession and correct spelling and grammar always shows a sign of sophistication. I; however, say that with caution. My grammar is something that I struggle with and hope to improve. I am looking forward to my senior year, and moving on to the adventures at college.